Chapter: Chapter 17 The hunted, The Bean Comic
Location: Culver's Gulch, Dundane Plains
The Bean 653
8 Comments
Just_IDD » 14 Sep 2015 »
I’d leave out the “the” between the “so” and “boy” That could be considered a character speaking trait. If you wanted to go that route you could change the bubble to “So, Boy is then nothing to us.” As a musing inflection, and leads nicely to the third bubble with the question.
Trav the bean » 17 Sep 2015 »
fixed
Mike C. » 14 Sep 2015 »
Heya Trav! I think you have an extra 'than' in the third panel. I love the use of shading here – it really sets the mood.
Celidah » 14 Sep 2015 »
Also, I think that "the" should be between "so" and "boy" (i.e. "so the boy"). Agreed with Mike, the shading really makes this page. 🙂
Trav the bean » 17 Sep 2015 »
ok guys i fixed it – thanks for the catch
ThePuck1 » 22 Sep 2015 »
Actually Trav, it still reads, " so the boy is nothing than to us?", and it probably should read "so the boy is nothing to us then?" which makes a lot more sense.
~ Puck
Trav the bean » 22 Sep 2015 »
ill fix it when i get back into town 🙂
Roy » 23 Nov 2015 »
Don't forget!
I can't say enough good things about the atmospherics of your art. It's so immersive!
Sven Böttcher
the young Hero find “the sword” and must proof himself against a huge Monster. Hmm.. with the last Page i hear the “Bossfight Theme” from Secret of Mana.
Rumblefeather
Bob!!!! Oh goddess!!!!! What have they done to you?!